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She walks into Starbucks but doesn't notice that the pretty girl she saw at the beginning is already sitting at one of the little round tables.

[2] Not that her feelings are all very complicated, but it's always hard to say exactly how this girl feels. She finds Geena very pretty and admires her air of "grace" or self-confidence, but you couldn't really say that Priscilla has a crush on Geena or is a lesbian just for thatit's a little more complicated than that.

It may be more like a "friend crush" which is sort of what Geena has for this girl. I'd like to just hint at them being lesbians and kind of play with that idea but they're not. They're thoughts might make them seem that way, but it's not because they are. They are probably both just looking for other friends-that-are-girls.

[3] Now my intention is to introduce Geena, the pretty girl. She begins observing Priscilla, who she never noticed before but is not strangely intrigued by her. She is mostly just writing in her journal observations. I'd appreciate if you kept this confidential for the most part b/c I have a friend named Gina, pronounced the same way, and I would hate for her to think this is about her, it's not at all, I just think it's a cool name and it can very well change. I'm also up for name-change suggestions seeing as I either think up a name on the spur of the moment or I can't think one up at all.

[4]The italicized parts are character's thoughts. They are either Geena's or Priscilla's-It depends on whose point of view it was prior to the italics. Let me know if this is confusing. In the first part, Priscilla's thoughts contrast what she says because it is in her first person point of view. Now that I'm in second person point of view, the only way to show thoughts is through italics.

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